Mon 3 Apr 2006
On Limericks*
Posted by anaglyph under Grumpy Old Man, Laughs, Poetry
[42] Comments
On my way to work this morning I heard a ‘comedian’ on the radio reciting a limerick. Not only was it not funny, it wasn’t properly a limerick. A nicely constructed limerick is an elegant gem of amusing poetry and the thing he coughed up was a leaden lump of clangourous word globs.
Herewith some rules for writing limericks:
The proper scan for a limerick is (where ‘a’ is a weak emphasis, and ‘B’, a strong):
a B a a B a a B (There was an old man with a beard)
a B a a B a a B (Who said ‘It is just as I feared…)
a B a a B (Two owls and a hen,)
a B a a B (Four larks and a wren)
a B a a B a a B (Have all built their nests in my beard!’)
There are some variations on the syllabic structure, but this is basically the plot. It’s really simple and you can easily feel it by clapping on the strong syllable (of course, to limerick writers this is the equivalent of moving your lips while reading to yourself, but I feel that if people started out by doing the clapping we would have far fewer terrible limericks in the world).
How, then, do people get it wrong so often? Consider:
There once was a young lady from Spain
This is incorrect. Can you see how it screws with the meter? You need to say either:
There was a young lady from Spain
or
There once was a lady from Spain
It is important to get the meter right in a limerick because that is one of the rules. You can’t just bandy any old thing about. Why? Because then it’s not a limerick. If you decide that you wish to change the rules, fine, but don’t introduce your effort as a limerick, but as a bad poem, which is what it will surely be.
Some other tips for writing limericks:
·Don’t start and end with the same line: this is an inferior form and should be avoided.â€
·Don’t use the same rhyming word more than once: it shows a lack of cleverness.
·Rhyme properly: ‘time’ doesn’t rhyme with ‘dine’
·Avoid contrivance in language or rhyme: if it sounds forced it will not work.
Once you have mastered these simple rules, off into the world you may venture and with luck you may even create some jewels such as these:
From the depths of the crypt at St Giles,
Came a scream that resounded for miles,
The vicar said ‘Gracious!
Has Father Ignatius
Forgotten the bishop has piles?’‡
or
I sat next to the Duchess at tea,
It was just as I feared it would be
Her rumblings abdominal
Were truly phenomenal
And everyone thought it was me!
When you have mastered the proper form, you may then join the elite and become revered. Consider this masterpiece from Edward Gorey:
There was a young curate whose brain
Was deranged by the use of cocaine
He lured a small child
To a copse dark and wild
Where he beat it to death with his cane
Gorey is not only in complete control of the form, but he has subverted it by making the punchline grim and surprising, an effect that only works because we are not expecting that outcome (it is, of course, a very Gorey thing to do).
The most skilfull limerickists (I just made that word up) then really excel. This one uses expected rhyme for a superb piece of trickery:
There was a young lady from Bude
Who went for a swim in the lake
A man in a punt
Stuck an oar in her ear
And said “You can’t swim here it’s private!”
See how wonderfully funny that is? But it’s only funny because it breaks the rules. Otherwise it would just be surrealism. And to break rules, you gotta know rules, capisci?
From there, the possibilities are endless. How about this:
A limerick fan from Australia
Considered his efforts a failure
His verses were fine
Until the fourth line
Or one of my favourites:
There was a young man from New Haven
Who had an affair with a raven
After wiping his chin
He declared with a grin
“Nevermore!”
Next week, on Post Bovus Ergo Propter Bovus, we investigate The Haiku. Please sharpen your knives.
Whoops. Er… sorry that’s seppuku.†â€
*I realise that by introducing a topic such as this I risk another worrying poetry competition between jedimacfan and Polanski. Sigh.
†As in: “There once was a man from Japan… That silly old man from Japan” Tsk.
‡Limericks don’t have to be bawdy, but it is a grand tradition.
††Which is what the guy on the radio should have immediately committed, if he’d had any common decency.
42 Responses to “ On Limericks* ”
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You really are a purest aren’t you?
Yep.
There once was a Reverend from Sydney
With half a bladder and kidney
He set out forthrightly
To ask Keira Knightley
To sign a nice photo for me
A for Effort.
D for Technique.
I’m afraid I just couldn’t approach Keira with such flimsy material.
Jedimacfan just got sadder
With his effort of kidney and bladder
If he’d taken more time
With his Keira K rhyme
Well, who knows? He could well have had her…
A lim’rick speaks of thing anatomical*
in a space that is quite economical
The ones that I’ve seen
so seldom are clean
and the clean ones are never as comical
*yes this first line breaks the rules, I know
A famous Vivyan Holland limerick, I believe…
Im werkin on a DOOZY, Revrend. Ts bout a young visionary from Medjugorje.
Im havin a real hard time wit th first line.
In my efferts t keep from breakin th rules, I may have clappd myself inta sevral broken fingrs.
I know you can do it Joey!
“A limerick,” it is claimed by some schmuck
“Makes no echo if read by a duck!”
Now, theories abound
On this Mystery of Sound
But since ducks cannot speak, WTF?
Anaglyph’s blog is the best
But the limericks? Just give them a rest
Your duck limerick’s boring
I found myself snoring
Your poetic skills I protest
Now see, that’s MUCH better.
You don’t need the ‘Just’ in the second line though. More correctly, I suggest:
Anaglyph’s blog is the best
But the limericks? Give them a rest!
Your duck rhyme is boring
I found myself snoring
Your poetic skills I protest
Fer me, ritin rymes is a snap
My limricks make yers soun like crap
You mite beat my metr
If you be th cheatr
An give yer poor readr th clap
See! I knew yez could do it Polanski!
9/10. Excellent scanning and topical. And even ribaldry. Go to the top of the class.
Is the man with the beard Albus Dumbledore?
Loved the duck rhyme!
When i was eleven we had to write limericks and couplets at school and i wrote several targeting a guy I hated… while others wrote absurd ones… hmm… time to blog!
There once was a ‘Doctor Who’ fan
Who adored the time-travelling man
But then the show stopped
And the poor girl’s heart dropped
And the ABC’s now in the trash can.
*grumbles about wanting series two*
Yeah, Series 2! Bring it on!
They came to our planet from space
An unknown and alien race
With ships that were swift
They took Anaglyph
Then departed the planet posthaste
Peter thought the aliens crass
Upset that they lacked any class
He was forced to disrobe
And then he was probed
Having metal shoved up his ass
The blog written by Rev Anaglyph
Is nothing short of terrif
With a Man (simple graphic)
Poems crude, rude and Sapphic
And Members both pickled and stiff
There was a poetic young man
Whose limericks never would scan
Said the Rev “You’re a dolt”
Said the man “It’s my fault.
You see, I always try to fit as many words into the last line as I possibly can.”
jedimacfan: Tsk. No matter how hard I try to keep the tone elevated, someone always manages to get an ass reference in. Sigh. Will this work never be done?
Cissy Strutt: Full marks. +1 for excellent crawling to the teacher. -1 for pinching someone else’s idea for the second one (but it is one of my favourites).
Some say that the Reverend is picky
When it comes to pursuits limericky
But if one is appalled
When the language is mauled
Then maintaining indifference is tricky
Well, I was going to break the rules and have it shoved up your nose but it sounds too similar to probed. No hard feelings, Rev
Besides which it would further dismember your already questionable rhyming structure…
Beware of the Prowler at night
A most hideous pillow-cased sight
Two holes cut for eyes
You’ll meet your demise
So don’t go to sleep, alright?
Ah, indeed! And stay tuned for some more Figments of My Imagination…
There was a young man from Australia
To the Rules, he quite aptly catered
So long as the Rules
Had nothing to do
Wit’ God and – God forbid – glossolalia!
If one is sufficiently schooled
In the ways in which men may be fooled
One may clearly perceive
That the need to believe
Is a folly quite easily fuelled
touché, maestro! — though thou hast played fast and loose with thine own rules
In lim’rick, I launched a volley
Plainly espousing my folly
But thy meter n’ rhyme
And wit so sublime
Have aptly derailed my trolley
Thy punn’ry could not have been neater
The punch line knocked out my feet-er
And when thou wast done
Twas plain thou had fun
Though thou cheat’d a bit wit’ da’ meter
Well, I cheated a bit with the rhyme to be more accurate. The meter, as always, is impeccable.
guilty on both counts, rabbi
This is one of my favourites. Not sure if it follows the rules:
She frowned and called him Mr.
Because in haste he kr.
And so in spite,
That very night,
This Mr. kr. sr.
And this one I made up (with revisions from Steve. Thank you, Steve)
She started to say LOL,
When offered his armpit to smell.
But on reflection,
Changed her direction,
And agreeably said WTH.
Are we brilliant?
Doc
Indeed brilliant you are, Doc Marten! And with an excellent grasp of the form. And wit to boot.
But what are you doing way down in April 2006! Come visit us in May 2007, where there are even more fun competitions going on!!
Just starting out, and inspired by a group I found on Facebook with the aim of converting the whole canon of English Literature into Limericks, I thought I would try a book by Orwell:
Now I know that “bother” doesn’t really fit the rhyme, but it is pretty close, so…
Should I give up now, or might I have a promising future in this field?
OldManLink: Don’t give up! That’s a pretty good start. But please, come up to January 2008 and join us for current fun & games!
Beware the humorous verse. It will teach you some lessons.
forgive me if this one is known by everyone, but i heard it the other day and near went off the road…..
There was a young man named Clyde
Who fell through an outhouse and died
Along came his brother
Who fell through another
And so they were interred side by side
This is kinda from part of the other at top but
There once was a woman from spain
Who had little else to gain
she was the richest you see
she was the one you would love to be
Until she went insane
ohh and thnx for help on my final exam
Lets sing em!
And drink!
I know this is an old thread, but it appears to have been revisited recently, so I thought I’d add my own. (I’m going through the archives chronologically, so I’ve only just gotten to this point.)
The folly of English orthography
Achieves heights of linguistic pornography
when the fish that you fry
is spelled g-h-o-t-i
For pleasure, instead of cryptography
I hope someone gets a chuckle out of it. :-)
Ah nice to see people still visiting the limerick post. That one is particularly good – is it yours?
I will always spell ‘fish’ thus from now on.